Sonorous wrote:
I changed the text a bit, because I forgot to describe the parts that explain the look I made. It seemed natural to me, but didn't think about the fact that others aren't me and it should all be explained. I also fould some mistakes while reading it again, so fixed those too.
It was already dark when he decided to go take a look. She left a while ago and he was getting anxious. Where could she have gone and why did it take so long? He slammed the door open and entered the long hallway leading him outside. He hasn't been afraid of the dark since he was a small child, but something about the place scared him to the bone. "They should really fix these lights, they're way too dark." The thought rushed through his head while he was running towards the back door. He was so busy trying to kill the voices inside his head, that he didn't notice the building changed with every step he took. The hallway became longer and the back door didn't seem to be in front of him anymore. It was replaced with a big staircase, leading him to the floor beneath. Without thinking about it, he went down the staircase, running towards the darkness, where overly shallow lights seemed a dream. While he was heading downstairs, the floor above him disappeared and so did the rest of the building. All that was left, was the room he entered when going down, without any artificial lights, nor any doors to escape to.
He was trapped and knew he couldn't do anything about it. His legs decided it had been enough, that they have done their job, so he collapsed onto the floor, trying to find the wall with his hands. He just sat there, with his back pressed against the stone wall, covered with a blanket of fear and tears. That's when he saw the faded light again. Moths were surrounding it, as if t was their saviour. He was a smart guy, so would have known moths meant trouble when they appeared, but wasn't aware of being stuck in a dream world and the creatures were completely harmless in the real world. He wiped his tears and stood up to walk towards the light. Then he saw her, the long wavy hair covering her face and soft skin that he always liked to caress. His tears started floading again. Her eyes, that he once loved, were ripped out of their sockets and her beautiful face was covered in blood. Her body wasn't even anywhere to be found. All that was left of her, was her disfigured head, lying on a pile of death.
He could feel he wasn't alone, but was unable to see who was with him. At some moments he captured glimpses of the dark shadow following him, but it wasn't clear. He never was able to see faces of strangers in his dreams, nor a single strain of hair, like they didnât have any. All he could see was darkness, surrounding the evil like a big coat, and blood, lots of it. The thing he feared the most in his nightmares was the silence and the fact that he couldnât scream when he needed to, so by then he should have figured out it was all an illusion, a fragment of his imagination. Yet, who is able to think straight while being possessed by fear? He was not, that's for sure. It all looked so real and terrifying, but the moment he felt his time had come, it was all over again, exactly like all the other times.
He felt relieved it was all just a bad dream, but learned two things from the experience; The first one being that he wasn't ready and would never be ready for the internship, cause it wasn't where he wanted to be in life. The second lesson he learned was that real life can also feel like a knife slicing through the body, cause he was glad she was still alive, but also was able to remember that she wasn't his to lose.
It was already dark when he decided to go take a look. She left a while ago and he was getting anxious. Where could she have gone and why did it take so long? He slammed the door open and entered the long hallway leading him outside. He hasn't been afraid of the dark since he was a small child, but something about the place scared him to the bone. "They should really fix these lights, they're way too dark." The thought rushed through his head while he was running towards the back door. He was so busy trying to kill the voices inside his head, that he didn't notice the building changed with every step he took. The hallway became longer and the back door didn't seem to be in front of him anymore. It was replaced with a big staircase, leading him to the floor beneath. Without thinking about it, he went down the staircase, running towards the darkness, where overly shallow lights seemed a dream. While he was heading downstairs, the floor above him disappeared and so did the rest of the building. All that was left, was the room he entered when going down, without any artificial lights, nor any doors to escape to.
He was trapped and knew he couldn't do anything about it. His legs decided it had been enough, that they have done their job, so he collapsed onto the floor, trying to find the wall with his hands. He just sat there, with his back pressed against the stone wall, covered with a blanket of fear and tears. That's when he saw the faded light again. Moths were surrounding it, as if t was their saviour. He was a smart guy, so would have known moths meant trouble when they appeared, but wasn't aware of being stuck in a dream world and the creatures were completely harmless in the real world. He wiped his tears and stood up to walk towards the light. Then he saw her, the long wavy hair covering her face and soft skin that he always liked to caress. His tears started floading again. Her eyes, that he once loved, were ripped out of their sockets and her beautiful face was covered in blood. Her body wasn't even anywhere to be found. All that was left of her, was her disfigured head, lying on a pile of death.
He could feel he wasn't alone, but was unable to see who was with him. At some moments he captured glimpses of the dark shadow following him, but it wasn't clear. He never was able to see faces of strangers in his dreams, nor a single strain of hair, like they didnât have any. All he could see was darkness, surrounding the evil like a big coat, and blood, lots of it. The thing he feared the most in his nightmares was the silence and the fact that he couldnât scream when he needed to, so by then he should have figured out it was all an illusion, a fragment of his imagination. Yet, who is able to think straight while being possessed by fear? He was not, that's for sure. It all looked so real and terrifying, but the moment he felt his time had come, it was all over again, exactly like all the other times.
He felt relieved it was all just a bad dream, but learned two things from the experience; The first one being that he wasn't ready and would never be ready for the internship, cause it wasn't where he wanted to be in life. The second lesson he learned was that real life can also feel like a knife slicing through the body, cause he was glad she was still alive, but also was able to remember that she wasn't his to lose.