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ET: Deadly Sins - Writing
Baileyyrosee
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bLNkBLrRY wrote:
the set is so BEAUTIFUL HOLY CRAP

and scared me for a sec cause i thought i HAVE to write a poem.

i can write stories right. or have i gone blind and seeing things wrong
Nope, doesn't have to just be a poem c:
Baileyyrosee
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Babooshka wrote:
Am I allowed to make a free verse poem?
Yes
Private
Living legend



In the land where the sun fade,there was a king.
He was the richest person in this land,the most greedy person who ever reigned in this land.
He always wanted more and more with no shyness.He had rooms full with gold and gems,but wasn't enough.In one day he ordered to the blacksmith of the court to cover different objects with gold.
That was something unseen at that time.
After many tries the blacksmith managed.That time,day after day,the king became more greendy,he wanted more and more.He covered his castle with gold and his garden became golden too.His clothes were covered with gold,everything which existed in the castle were covered in gold.
In one day,his wife died.The Greedy King was impatient,he could not accept something like that."How could I accept something like that?" was his thought. " I never lost something in my life,how could i lose my wife?" 
In the next day,he ordered the blacksmith to cover his wife in gold.Everyone was shocked,something like this was unbelievable.The blacksmith rejected the king's command.He lost his head.
The king ordered to the blacksmith's disciple to transform his wife in gold.
The disciple accepted the command.
1 month passed since the Queen died and The king didn't changed.When his little kids were sick he ordered to the blacksmith,the disciple one,to transform his kids in gold.The blacksmith accepted and transformed the kids in gold.
After 50 years,in one morning,when the king were on his deathbed,he ordered to the blacksmith to cover every person from the castle with gold.When the sun fade,all people from the castle were gold statues.With the last breath,The Greedy King ordered again "Blacksmith,transform myself into gold too.I want to reing my kingdom even after I'm dead".The blacksmith accepted the command.

Private
Living legend



I hope it's not too long...o.o
I have no idea how to make it short 
Djinn
National star



ShinXue wrote:
I hope it's not too long...o.o
I have no idea how to make it short 
I think it's very short. o_o
And interesting. Sounds like a legend or something. @ShinXue 
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Can you feel it, the corruption ? It’s tearing you apart with every word you scream, turning you into a black hole. And it sucks the life out of everyone that dares getting too close to you. But at the same time it forces you to show your true colors, stripping you off of your humanity. The greed. You’re no longer the same person you remember yourself as, you’re.. Different, a mere stranger. Are you even a person in this very moment ? You’re well aware that it’s coursing through your blood and poisons your mind; and like a puppet, you’re enslaved.

You can’t break free from its grasp, no matter how hard you try to. This is what it has done for centuries and will do for the centuries to come, it feeds off on ruining lives and humans. Us weak mortals can’t compare to it - we’re inferior. Always will be. It whispers sweet nothings into your ear and it sounds like a symphony, one that no one can truly seem to grasp the concept of. In reality it’s manipulating you, turning you into a weapon. Against your loved ones and everyone else. That’s how it ruins lives in its wake.

It doesn’t care whether it ruins lives, it only cares about inflicting other hosts. And greed is like a deadly disease: this is its play zone and we’re the toys. The embodiment of greed comes in all shapes and sizes, but one thing’s for sure - where there's wealth, there’s bound to be greed. It loves exquisite garments made of the finest materials, basking in the glory of living in a mansion, owning antique furniture and drinking expensive wine. At first it appears harmless, until it sinks its claws into you and you realize that greed has a hold of you.

You’re terrified by the thought of that, but what’s worse is, you’re used to its familiarity. It made itself at home in your chaotic state of mind and ask yourself this: what price did you have to pay ? One would believe that it’s affecting you physically, though that’s far from the truth. Your soul is decaying, neglecting the realm of the spiritual. It consumed you, until you’re no longer human. You’ve become the personification of greed, filled with nothing but a burning desire for wealth. And you want it all, no matter what you have to do to retrieve it.
Private
International star



procrastinating to write my entry sjdfksjdf
Private
Living legend



djinn wrote:
ShinXue wrote:
I hope it's not too long...o.o
I have no idea how to make it short 
I think it's very short. o_o
And interesting. Sounds like a legend or something. @ShinXue 

It seems like i'm very creative when night comes XD @djinn 
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Am I allowed to use an old competition entry? Like, not a writing one but the one I used for Bring Your Nightmares to Life comp? 
I thought about expanding the story of Bethelzda 
www.en.virtualpopstar.com/social/forum?category=11&topic=208762&p=12
Firefly
International star



I did a very short poem
here it is:

The chain that chokes her
That silver gold slur
The pretty shiny things
Pick and tear and scratch her skin
Her skeleton is golden plated
Every inch of her is hated
The necklace like a rope
Her whole attires a kaleidoscope
But the lonely live here
With their money they sneer
Always holding wealth near
In hopes it'll diminish their fear. 
Djinn
National star



ShinXue wrote:
djinn wrote:
ShinXue wrote:
I hope it's not too long...o.o
I have no idea how to make it short 
I think it's very short. o_o
And interesting. Sounds like a legend or something. @ShinXue  Xue 

It seems like i'm very creative when night comes XD @djinn 
Haha, I get tired at night. I haven't felt creative enough to write anything about greed yet. I think I won the gluttony writing comp?? Not sure, but I got the set from some competition. XD
Private
Popstar



The Musician

If I told you that the sound of music flew in the air, what kind of music would you think about? Robin didn't think about any special kind of music. He thought about music in a strange way, like it was something concrete, as if he could touch the music, as if he saw the music. Of course, nobody knew that, because Robin didn't tell anyone, and he looked just like a boy would look like, so nobody thought he was any different, but in one way, he was.

The thing that made Robin stand out was his passion for music. He could play almost every instrument there was. He played the piano, the violin, the trumpet, and so on. Robin didn't stick to one type of music either. He could play pop music just as well as he could play classical music, and he could play rock just as well as country.

At this point, you may be thinking about how his friends could be so ignorant about all of this. Because Robin had friends, I think he had. Everyone looked at him as an ordinary kid, with no really special abilities. Robin told me how he learned to play all of these instruments, but he didn't want that many people to know, I may tell you anyway though, but not now, because you need to know more about Robin as a person first.

Robin wasn't clever or academic, but he was a good kid, and treated everyone with the respect they deserved. He ate his lunch, he did his homework and he did pretty okay on tests. Robin was the oldest sibling in a family of six, his mom, his dad and three little sisters, however, two of them were twins and they looked almost identical.

You may have understood that Robin was nothing more than a normal kid, if you exclude the music. But then, again, there was the music. Robin could touch the music, hold it in his hands and form it the way he wanted. He showed me once, and I couldn't see anything, because I cannot see music. Even though I could not see it, I felt it, and I heard it. It was like Robin became something else than a human when he worked with his music. It was so beautiful, so mystical, so wonderful, that I could barely believe it was true.

Robin was a very greedy person, and when I say that, I don't mean the usual "greed," where you want to have the most of everything and you dislike sharing. Robin just held his gift to himself. He never shared it with anyone. I thought he was so greedy I just wanted to snap at him and shake him and make him show me how he did it. Of course he didn't, and when i confronted him with it, he just smirked and said he couldn't share. Greedy.

All of this happened around 40 years ago, but I still remember the music, it was indescribably amazing. Nowadays, nobody knows where Robin is. I think I know, but I don't want to admit it. What if he just lived in my head all these years, what if I fell in love with my own imagination, what if I am insane, what if the music never really flew in the air, what if it was all in my head? I am not afraid of being crazy, I am just afraid of losing something I never really had.  






aa I hope I interpreded greed good enough, I thought a lot while writing this story and hgfhed iiidk
PearlPika
Streetmusician



My Entry

He saw money all around him. Since birth society's money hungry eyes had been watching him like a vulture. He prayed for a better world,a world were possessions didn't decide someones self worth,a world were want for wealth ceased to exist. By age 10 he was not questioning why the sky was blue,but why daddy couldn't finish work early to come see his school play,the only reply he got was "the money is very important sweetie." At age 15 he was writing angry blog post's about society's corrupt ideals. At age 20 he was constantly arguing with his parents that his mental state was more important than his bank balance,they brushed off his tear stained cheeks and hoarse voice as a cry for attention and simply told him to grow up and get a job. At age 25 he was living in a cramped apartment with 3 other people,eating cereal and noodles every night. He wrote for the local newspaper and earned just enough to buy flowers for his love every Friday. By age 30 he was living in a decent sized apartment and now had a senior editorial spot in one of the country's most popular newspapers. He spent his evenings in the office and his days off splurging on expensive watches. When he was 35 his wallet was full of notes and his wardrobe full of expensive suits,yet he longed for more,so he would cut his staff down if it meant higher cost's for his business.Then one day,at age 40, when his 10 year old asked him why he missed his birthday party, he shook his head,sipped his coffee and replied "son I was like you once but soon you'll realize that money makes the world go round." And so he lived the rest of his days forgetting his youth and teaching his children that without money you will fail,he tells them stories about his protest and how they only cause pain and suffering. Little did he know that his children did not look up to him nor did they follow his ways,because they knew it was better to be a poor man in a rich world than a rich man in a poor world.

Hope this was okay(and not to short.)


Private
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The greed girl

A girl named Tiana livied in a house with her family. She was happiest girl ever in the world. Her family loved her and she is a good student in the school. She have also a crush on the pretty boy in the school that he also had a crush on her too. But she wasen't happiest girl in the world anymore.

One day a girl named Gina come to her school. The girl was so pretty and she have all the boys attention and she alyways have jewelry and gold rings on her. All the girls loved her style. The girl even said that she have a crush on the pretty boy. Gina was so happy and so pretty, so Tiana get jealous at her.

One day Tiana come home from school crying and realize she was nothing then her. She was crying all night till the next moring. She decided to stay all day at home. Tiana looked at the mirror and She asked herself.
- Why does she get so many boys and the attention from? Everybody loves her and even the girls say she have a pretty style. She even said she had a crush on the pretty boy. But why if he gonna love her back and not me? She was crying.
She went to the kitchen and She stole her moms money and decided to go to the store and shop her some new clothes and rings. She bought evey expensive things in the she saw in the store and she even bought some gold rings.
The next day she put the makeup on and her new clothes she bought and her gold rings. She was now the prettiest girl in the school and everyone likes her. Gina was now nothing than her. Tina stole more money from her mom and bought new clothes every week.
But one day she asked her crush if he loves the new Tiana then that old Tiana. The boy said he was in love with her like she was before, but now she always care about how she looks and all her gold rings she loves more then that boy. He said,
- i dont love you anymore. I want the old Tiana back. I loved her as she was not how she looks. You dont have a heart. You love more the rings more then me. She laugh at him and slapped the boy in the face and run home fast as she could.
She was crying in her room and her heart have turned into a stone now. She was so cold. . The whole world is spinning around the diamonds and gold. Her mom come finally home and asked where's hers money at? Her mom gets angry at her and decided to kick Tiana out from the house. Tiana was still pretty, but she have nowhere to sleep her crush said he dont love her any more. She saw Gina with her crush and they hold the hand together. They was happy but not happy as Tiana was now. She wants to be happier than they are Tiana dont believe in true love any more. The jewelry have always been with her and never been mean at her. She fall in love with her ring. Now She wants have more golden rings!


-The story is based on a true story of someone's Life i know. Dont be that girl like her. Take care of the people who are there for you and loves you as you are. Be yourself as you are and dont let the material things take over your life.
 
 
(sorry for my bad english grammar, but i hope you understand the story!)
Julia
International star



Thy neighbour, give me your land
My heart longs for your everlong grand
Penthouses, cars and gold up to your ears
How will I be able to bring out your fears?
Force you to be under my command
Oh, thy neighbour, how I have planned
Planned to make me your worst enemy
Oh god, how all this jealousy made me be

Soon you'll be begging down on your knees
Talking to me, saying pretty, pretty, please
I'll be denying you when you knock on the doors
The doors, that once upon a time used to be yours





(sidenote: i have no idea what i just wrote lmao)
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